and if : at the foundation of all there lay only a
wildly seething power which writhing produced
everything that is great : if a bottomless void : never
satiated : lay hidden beneath all : what then would
life be : like Feynman said : nature uses only the
longest threads : : and your passion in this image
tells me take Isaac to Moriah and leave him as a
burnt offering on the mountain : : his body a
question : do all of our dead cease to exist in the
head : in the heart : in the hand of the living : and
the answer the same : unequivocally : no : : a
woman told me once : camino bailando y con tus
palabras : I walk dancing and your words surround
me and turn me and turn me around and around :
vueltas y vueltas y vueltas y cuando paro : and when
I stop : ya no se donde estoy : I can no longer say
where I am : : you told me once : if you’re
passionate burn it : be good at suffering : and after
this flower I can say only one thing : we’re at the
very beginning of the human race : and the sky is
black for a reason
I like this, especially the image of a wheeling, spinning woman who comes to a stop to observe ‘if you’re passionate burn it’ The last line is very tight and tight is good. Not sure about the use of colons to separate what might otherwise be lines. I tend to be ‘conservative’ re: prose poem formatting–otherwise why not write a lineated poem,–but that’s just my preference. “What is poetry and if you know what is poetry, what is prose.” Gertrude Stein, Poetry and Grammar
Brad! Thanks for reading I just came across your comment and I am sorry it took me five years to get back to you, but here I am 🙂